Poetry of Space .. Reading the poem “A Journey to the Top” by the poet Said Al-Saqlawi

Mohamed Saber Obaid:
Poetic space is reached in modern poetry when the search for lost time, lost place and lost vision continues. One is (Two songs to my mother), which puts an adequate biographical definition of her in the margins: (My mother: She is Salima bint Saif bin Muhammad Al Mukhainya, my first teacher and teacher of the Qur’an.)
The poem knocks across the sea of ​​the bald to show the image of the mother as she reproduces the poetic space from the unity of old time, the ancient place and the ancient vision, and the narrator’s poetic subjective language expresses the highest degrees of sympathy in capturing the corners of space:
know my mother
she showed
She was
you ask)
The plastic figurative focus is directed towards cutting the time of memory and erasing it from the painting of poetic existence when the question is opened to (the rest).
(Is it true
What remains the most beautiful)
Poetic questions about the units of poetic space continue, at the forefront of which is the unit of time as the most influential unit in the sensitivity of spatial composition within the scene.
(and why
We do not feel time
Or will it be longer tomorrow?
And then the issue of beautiful nasheed acoustic rhythm associated with time in an ideal model of it that allows the freedom that contributes to shaping space as needed:
(why not
We hear the bird sing
not you
find the best time)
This is followed by the issue of enjoying time in a restoration of sensual image that enjoys a sensitivity associated with the nature factor as it gives the place its visionary space charged with the energy of poetry:
(Why do not we drink?
our coffee under the bed)
The poetic question pattern is manifested by the means (lam) directed towards the effectiveness of the specific taste by drinking (we do not drink), and more authentically determines the quality of the drink stuck in the popular memory (our coffee) in the chosen place. (under the feathers), which is the familiar shade of Oman. Era Zaki) according to the poet’s explanatory margin.
After that, a series of questions coming out of the vehicle light (Lim) rush to prolong the act of reading in search of maximum calm:
(we read
in the newspapers of the day without confusion)
And then, in the same context, the act of writing touches the seeker for the maximum degree of freedom under the authority of a place, a time and a vision that constitutes the space required:
(we write
In the eye of lights without marginalization)
The continuation of the dream of freedom, when the subject is allowed to look in the mirror without barriers, barriers or censorship, makes this small space of freedom unattainable, in the light of the formation of the poetic space for which it is impossible to grow without selfishness. in the simplest cases:
(we see
In the self-mirror without inspection)
To make the dream of flight come true and to go to the farthest possible space of space-time, which allows the poetic vision filled with freedom to paint the picture of the poetic space with the highest possible efficiency:
(And we fly the wings of a bright dream)
However, these successive formal questions stand on the threshold of the temporal question that revolves around vision because it understands the fate of the poetic event in the circle of space, where time (time) becomes a prisoner handcuffed by the poetic actor while he is . in a state of extreme questioning:
(Let our time be bound)
Poetic vision in poetry opens up another vital field that draws an active vocabulary network in shaping the model of space, part of which moves in the circle of self, part in the circle of the other, and part third in the circle of nature at the level of descriptions, attributes and conditions together, so that the matter of time is liberated again and sends its messages towards the open horizon more freely:
(Why not listen to music and sing?
or the innocence of laughing and buying a child
Won’t we rejoice in both fresh and sour palms?
And shorten our feelings with longing and glow
We narrate poetry with beauty, love and praise
Do you see that the pulse of time is off)
The network of harmonious and poetically mutually supportive functions is “music / singing / laughter / innocence / child / bloating / palm / recent / confession / our feelings / longing / shame / poem / beauty / beauty / deep longing / grabbing time / It seemed a bit exaggerated, in a way that allows the poetic space in poetry to move towards a wider horizon for the display of vision:
(why not
Our vision is the patience of conscience
We praise the human being
to man)
Oman’s popular heritage rushes to deepen the adoption of poetic space in order to meet the necessary conditions of concept formation, as it contributes to expanding the vital field of space to include everything related to soul, practice, action, imagination, vision, country. , time and state The question environment is the stylistic means of holding the elements of space and its formations:
(why not
we lose
in the field
or feed
among the Brotherhood
or comfort us)
This poetic scenic image combines this folklore with what the poet explains in the margins for each node of the figure folklore, so we know that (Narzah) is (dance of enthusiasm in Oman), and we know in the same context that (Nabra ‘) is the dance of joy in the south and east of Oman. And he (Al-Azi) is (an enthusiastic solo song accompanied by a choir), which all fall into a dynamic poetic formation that pleases the poetic man . condition under the umbrella of poetic space.
The vitality of the poetic landscape is complemented by an interrogative appendix that raises another phonetic rhythm coming from another source and seeks to construct the rhythmic vision of the needs of the construction of the poetic space in its qualitative model here:
(why not
of water that threatens a falaj)
Listening to the conversation of water is in an allegorical sensibility that borrows its rhythm and meaning from the meaning of (Falaj), which the poet defines as (the main wheel of water, an irrigation system that characterizes Oman), with what this water – usually comes. from the bellies of the mountains – carries purity, purity and hope.
Water here turns into a humanized poetic space and gives an added emotional energy that refers to the first time associated with motherly time. Between her departure and the survival of the fittest, there is an emotional distance that carries more soliloquy. responsibility and salvation:
Feel ashamed inside
Abused with the stones of time
I traveled
the first time he ran away
Of which
best time left)
The poetic picture opens here on two rails; The first course relates to the idea of ​​the mother leaving and the first time to be held after her as her guardian, and the second course relates to trying to maintain the mother’s presence in the rest of the beautiful things she refers to and remembers. , so the phrase (the most beautiful tense) is the poetic phrase that represents the moment of poetic concentration at the end, To put its mark on the general atmosphere in poetry and work in the context of the poetic alternative with its adequate potential.
(.) What remains of Al-Wajd, Saeed Al-Saqlawi, International Center for Cultural Services, Beirut, 1, 2020: 25.

❋ Iraqi academic and critic

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